Student’s Comments:
What I like:
I like the “period” feeling . The original photograph was taken in 1900 and I hoped to capture the image as it might have been painted at the time.
What could be improved for next time:
I am not sure what I could improve, I just feel it lacks something
Dan’s Comments:
Hi Stephen!
What I like:
- Interesting and challenging composition. Reminds me of Mary Cassatt’s work.
- The small areas of positive (active) space balance nicely against the large areas of negative (quiet) space.
- I like the contrast between warm (red) and cool (blue) colors. Particularly in relation to the strong accents on the two figures.
What could be improved for next time:
- The drapery/clothing could be more compelling. Look at the work of John Singer Sargent and Diego Velázquez for inspiration. Focus on big, simple shapes, dark accents, and highlights.
- For the skin tones, look at the beach paintings by Joaquín Sorolla. Take note of all the subtle colors he uses for the skins, particularly in the shadows.
- Careful not to get caught up in the tiny details. Narrow down on the few essential details and focus on them.
Also, you might be interested in this post on painterly brushwork.